Final Article Pages

Final Contents page

Final Front Cover

Teacher Assessment

Front Cover:

*The puffs on the page are too long – they should not be full sentences but punchy and eye-catching.

*Does your magazine have a slogan?

*Make your buzz words stand out more.

*This is the first edition – how are you promoting it to the audience?

Contents:

*Some of the images appear to be squashed – make sure that you resize effectively

*Consider taking more photographs on location rather than just having studio photographs. All the images on the page are mid-shots with little thought about mise-en-scene. By going out and taking photographs you will have a better range.

Article: 

*Check all spellings as Photoshop will not do this for you.

*The main body of text is too big. Remember that magazine pages are slightly smaller than A4 so you will need to reduce the size by at least one third. Also, some of the questions are in gold but others aren’t – correct this.

*Page numbers are needed. 

Peer Assessment

Peer Assessment 1: 

Front Cover:

• Cover: Good use of puffs, however, the text should be integrated with the text more. Maybe, there could be more puffs around the main artist on the front cover.
• Super Impose: You could super impose the main person in front of the title, to make her stand out and bring more attention to the magazine.
• Graphic Image: The graphic image and the text could be a little bigger, to entice people to purchase your magazine.
• Title Block: You could try smoothing out the title block so that it looks like it fits in with the main image and puffs on your front cover.
  
  

Contents:

• Colour of headers: I do like how the colours of your headers are the same as the colours on your title block, however, maybe the colours for your headers could be darker, to make them stand out against the light background of your page.
• Secondary images: Perhaps you could have signatures to go with your images; so that it doesn’t look too plain, like you did with ‘Tiana Taylor’.

 

Article: 

• Article Pages: The layout of the magazine looks very professional, which really helps me gain an idea of who your target audience is. However, some of the questions you asked in your magazine article haven’t been highlighted so it looks like the person being interviewed is asking themselves the questions.
• Spelling errors: You made a few spelling mistakes, don’t worry it’s only a few! ‘Rendering’ and also, in a few sentences, you typed ‘I’ in lowercase instead of capitalising it.
• Quotes: Perhaps you could have one or two more quotes on the images, so that you have more integration of text with the images, otherwise it is a very good article and throughout the magazine, the language is very formal.

Peer Assessment 2:

Front Cover:

Cover: To improve you can put the price down by the barcode make the buzz word Exclusive more Exclusive than it is by maybe making it bigger and bolder possible a different font or have a different background. The words ‘Exclusive interview with Jazmine Sullivan’ is smaller than the other puffs on the front cover so maybe you should make it bigger and then make the artist name within the sentence big instead of having her name twice. Make the bar code smaller and maybe move is to the other side of the page and move the graphic image to wear the bar code is but make it bigger.

Contents:

Contents: the picture of ‘Jazmine’ at the top of the page looks squashed maybe retake or resize picture so it’s not so squashed. I like the fact that you put a picture of the chief Editor and a comment from her to the readers.

Article: 

Article Pages: in the first bit of your article you say that her ‘hair is worn loose in her signature curls’ this means that her fans may be expecting her hair to be loose and in curls but in the pictures her hair is in a bun so you might need to change that. In the first question there is a mistake as it says ‘what is the name of you first album and why did you named it this?’. Make all the questions the same colour and not the same colour as the quot. Start a new line after the question so it is clear when the artist is speaking. The quote’ Heart Rendring intense and powerful’ the word Rendring is spelt incorrect it is spelt Rendering. The end sentence you have put ‘she’s a gifted person who’s is down to earth’ there is a mistake in this sentence as it doesn’t make sense. The last sentence ‘There hasn’t been a confirmation date yet.’ I don’t think that you really need this sentence. I like the fact that at the end you put the interviewers’ name and photographers name at the end of the article.

Self-Assessment

Front Cover: What I should improve on my front cover. The puffs on my front cover I should add more text so that it looks more integrated, so I should add puffs around my central image, so that it could balance out my front cover, also the buzz word “exclusive” I should make it more effective by making it bigger and bolder or maybe a different font so that it can stand out because it’s smaller than the other puffs. I will move my price near the barcode and make the barcode smaller. I will make my graphic image bigger so that it will attract my audience to buy my magazine. I will also try to smooth out my title so that it fits in with the main image and puffs on my front cover. This is what I will be doing to improve my front cover.  

Content’s page: On my contents page I should improve on is focusing on resizing my main artist picture because she currently looks “squashed” so I should therefore resize the image. I will also improve on the colour of my title block; I should make the colours darker so that my title block will stand out. I will also add in signatures from the artist on their image so that it does not look too plain. This is what I will be doing to improve my contents page.  

Article pages: Improving on my article page, I will highlight all the question’s so that my audience will not get confused, also it will make the question standout from the white background. The spelling’s in my article I will double check that it’s spelt right and not wrong, I will also make sure that my “I” are in capital. I will reread my magazine so that it makes sense and change some of the sentences so that my audience will understand and expect things, for example where I wrote in my first paragraph was a description on how Jazmine Sullivan looked on that day “hair worn loose in her signature curls” I will change this to how she looks like in the photo shoot. I will also add in more quotes it will have more integration. This is what I will be doing to improve on my article.  

Double page article draft